Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The rendered bar graph depicts the information about the figure of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
Overall, the percentage of household in rented accommodation was decreased in given time period, whereas the figure of owned household was increased by time period.
In detail, the proportion of owned house nearly 22% in 1918 and approx 75% ware rented house in England and Wales. After that in 1918 to 1971 owned accommodation were inclined. In 1939 purchased house figure rise up and reached at 31% and nearly 32% in 1953. Again it went up by 1961 it reached at 40% . and 49%. Then it a increased in all years. In 1981 an increasing trend was observed in the proportion of owned household. it was 60% in 1981 and 65% in 1991 to 2001. In last year it was reached at 62% .
The term of owned and rented and own household in 1971 were similar proportion. After 21 year it was decreased in all years 72% and 71% in 1918 to 1939. 73% in 1953 then In 1961 it was decreased and reached at 58%. Then decards year it were agin declined and In 2001 it was 29% and In the last year it was again decreased it was reached at 35% .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main trends, such as the overall increase in home ownership and the decline in renting. However, the report is marred by significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For example, you state that 75% were rented in 1918, but the graph shows a much higher figure. Furthermore, the description of the data is often confusing, particularly when discussing the crossover point in 1971. The reporting of specific years and percentages is inconsistent and sometimes contradictory, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the trends accurately. To improve, ensure that you carefully verify the data points against the graph and present them in a logical, chronological order.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the internal flow is problematic. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'In detail' and 'After that', which do not always logically connect the sentences. The progression of ideas is hindered by the repetitive structure of the sentences and the lack of clear referencing. For instance, the transition between the discussion of owned and rented accommodation is abrupt and confusing. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that guides the reader through the information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'increased', 'decreased', and 'reached', which restricts the sophistication of the report. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the figure of households' and 'purchased house figure rise up'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the message. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', or 'remained stable', and ensure that you use nouns and verbs correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include incorrect verb tenses ('was decreased', 'were inclined'), missing articles, and subject-verb agreement errors ('decards year it were agin declined'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced periods and capitalization issues. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and pluralization.
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