Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Thr rendered bar graph depicts the information about the proportion of households in bought and rented accomdation in England and Wales during given time period.
Overall,the percentage of owned house increased by time period,while the proportion of rented house decreased during time period.
In detail, the percentage of owned house was 21 percent in 1918 and 78 percent house were rented in England and Wales. After 21 years, purchased house percentage increased and reached at 30 percent and rented house percentage decreased and touched it 68 percent. In 1953, 31 percent houses bought in England and Wales. 67 percent house were rented in 1953. The percentage of houses owned and rented in 1961 was 40 and 59 percent respectively.
Interestingly, same proportion of owned and rented houses in 1971 , which was 50 percent. In 1981, 60 percent houses were ownded in England and Wales. The percentage of houses were rented it was 40 percent. The percentage of owned and rented houses in 1991 was 60 and 31 percent. In 2001, 69 houses were bought and 31 houses were rented in England and Wales. 63 percent purchased house in 2011 and 38 percent houses were rented in England and Wales.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main trends and provides data points to support the description. However, the report is essentially a list of figures rather than a cohesive summary. While you identified the overall trends, the analysis lacks a clear comparison between the two categories throughout the period. For instance, the data for 1953 and 2011 contains inaccuracies compared to the source, and the reporting of figures is somewhat repetitive. To improve, focus on grouping data points to highlight the most significant changes rather than listing every year individually, and ensure the data extracted from the chart is precise.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the progression of ideas is mechanical. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures to list data, which hinders the flow. Cohesive devices are limited; for example, you use 'In detail' and 'Interestingly' to start paragraphs, but there is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect the trends between the two categories. The paragraphing is acceptable, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs more variety to guide the reader through the data effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You frequently repeat words like 'percentage', 'houses', 'rented', and 'owned'. There are also some spelling errors, such as 'accomdation' and 'ownded', and awkward phrasing like 'touched it 68 percent'. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of synonyms and collocations related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'figures', 'accommodation', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'. The current range is sufficient to convey the basic meaning but does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher scores.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in articles ('the percentage of owned house'), subject-verb agreement, and preposition usage ('increased by time period'). Additionally, some sentences are grammatically awkward, such as '69 houses were bought and 31 houses were rented', which is factually confusing as it refers to percentages. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from being considered fluent or highly accurate. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small errors would be beneficial.
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