Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart illustrates the percentage of households between 1918 to 2011 in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales.

Overall, the chart shows the relative percentage of households in owned accommodation and rented accommodation. Where rented accommodation moved downward throughout these years and owned accommodation had an upward trend.

Firstly, households in owned accommodation was little over 20% in 1918 after a year it reached 22% and then remained almost same for a year. In 1961 it had an increase of almost 10% later in year 1971 it reached 50% same as rented accommodation. Following the same increase it reached 69% in 2001 and had a slight fall in 2011 reaching 63%.

Secondly, households in rented accommodation started in 1918 as high as 77% with a decrease of 8% it reached 69% in 1939 and remained same in 1953. With a deduction of 10% it reached 59% in 1961 and was at 50% in 1971 same as owned accommodation and kept its downward trend till 2001 reaching 31%. At the end, it had a small upward trend reaching 36% in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the chart well, identifying the key trends for both owned and rented accommodation. You successfully highlighted the crossover point in 1971 and the general inverse relationship between the two categories. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by some inaccuracies in data reporting, such as the claim that ownership remained 'almost same for a year' after 1918, which is not clearly supported by the visual data. To reach a higher band, ensure that your data points are precise and that you avoid unnecessary filler phrases. The overview is clear, but could be more concise to better highlight the most significant shifts over the period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The use of linking words like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' helps guide the reader through the information. However, the cohesion is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions between sentences feel slightly disjointed. For instance, the transition between the 1939 and 1953 data points in the second paragraph is a bit abrupt. Improving the variety of cohesive devices—moving beyond simple sequence markers—would help the flow of the response feel more natural and sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'upward trend', 'downward trend', and 'deduction' appropriately. However, there are some instances of repetitive phrasing and slightly unnatural word choices, such as 'little over 20%' and 'remained same'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'experienced a marginal decline'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the flexibility and precision required for the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'households in owned accommodation was' should be 'were', and 'in year 1971' should be 'in the year 1971'). Additionally, some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'started in 1918 as high as 77%'. Increasing your control over complex sentence structures and proofreading for minor errors in articles and prepositions will significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

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