Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the given bar chart illustrates the information of the household owned and rented in England and Wales in between the year of 1918 to 2011. In the year 1918 the number of people who live in the rented accommodation houses is more than the owned household accommodation. in 1918 the bar graph show's that the household in rented accommodation in nearly 80% and on the contrary the people who owned their own house is slightly higher than the 20%. Between the year 1918 to 2011 there is a year 1971, the 50% of the people live in the rented household and other 50% live in their own household. the bar graph also illustrates the information in the year 2001 that the people who owned their own household's number is increased approximately 78%, and on the contrary the people who live rented household that number is 32% only. between the 1918 to 2011 the bar graph illustrates that the people from England and Walse are buying their own household.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the initial dominance of rented accommodation and the subsequent shift toward home ownership. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear overview. While you mention specific years like 1918, 1971, and 2001, the description of the trends is repetitive. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the overall trend in the introduction or conclusion and avoid simply listing data points. The comparison between the two categories is present, but it could be more analytical by highlighting the 'crossover' point more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. IELTS Task 1 responses should be structured with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs to group related information. Cohesive devices are limited and somewhat mechanical; for example, you use 'on the contrary' repeatedly, which is not always the most natural choice for comparing data. The progression of ideas is present but lacks the logical flow that would be achieved through better paragraphing and a wider variety of linking words.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You frequently repeat phrases like 'the people who owned their own household' and 'rented accommodation'. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'household's number is increased' instead of 'the percentage of owned households increased'. To reach a higher band, try to use more varied terminology such as 'home ownership rates', 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'witnessed a significant rise'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('in between the year of 1918 to 2011'), subject-verb agreement ('the bar graph show's'), and awkward phrasing ('the people who live rented household'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and unnecessary apostrophes. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors occur throughout the text and prevent the response from reaching a higher band.
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