Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the given bar chart illustrates the proportion of owned and rented households accommodation in england and wales between 1918 and 2011.

it can be clearly seen that, there was a completely opposite trends over the period. rented accommodation was far more common in the beginning. but by 2011 home ownership had become dominant. the two figures were similar only in 1971.

in 1918, renting was the most prevalant form of housing, with approximately 78% of households in rented accomodation compared to just 23% who owned their homes. the percentage of renters then declined steadily, although it remained above 50% until 1971. by 2011 it had fallen to about 35%.

by 2011, home ownership rose consistently throughout the 93-year period. starting at just over 20% in 1918, the figure reached 50% in 1971, matching the rate of renting for the only time. then ownership continued increase at peak level around 70% in 2001 before dropping slightly to 65% in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response effectively identifies the main trends and provides a clear overview of the data. You successfully highlighted the inverse relationship between the two categories and noted the crossover point in 1971. The data is accurately reported, and the key features are well-selected. To reach a higher band, ensure that all comparisons are fully supported by the data; for instance, you mentioned a 'peak level' in 2001, which is a good analytical observation. The response is well-structured and covers all parts of the task requirements effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized, with a clear introduction, a summary of trends, and specific body paragraphs for the data. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'in 1918', 'by 2011', and 'then', which help the flow. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic. To improve, try to incorporate a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect sentences and ideas more fluidly, which would help the text feel less like a list of facts and more like a cohesive report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'prevalent', 'consistently', and 'dominant'. There are a few minor spelling errors, such as 'accomodation' (should be 'accommodation') and 'prevalant' (should be 'prevalent'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and variety of less common lexical items that would elevate the response to a higher band. Focusing on more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will help improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'there was a completely opposite trends' (should be 'there were completely opposite trends') and 'ownership continued increase' (should be 'continued to increase'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization at the start of sentences. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that complex structures are used with greater accuracy. The errors present do not impede communication, but they do limit the score.

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