Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
In the begining, the year of 1918 the percentage of households in owned accomodation was aroundabout 20% and rented accommodation was more than 70%. In this year, the ratio of accommodation on rented were higher. Then, in 1939 the ratio of house holds in owned was 30% and the ratio of rented accommodation was more than 60 %.In 1953 the owned and rented accommodation were same percentage that was in 1939. But in 1961 the ratio of owned houses was about 40% and rented houses was between 50% and 60% then , in 1971 the ratio of both accommodation were 60%. At the year of 1981 owned accommodation was increased about 60% and rented accommodation was decreased was about 40%. while in 1991 the owned was continoucly decreased and remain at 33% . In 2001 the ratio opf owned accommodation was about some how 70% and rented accomodation was 30%.At the end in 2011 the owned accommodation was more than 60% and rented accommodation was 35%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main trends, such as the initial dominance of rented accommodation and the subsequent rise in home ownership. However, the analysis is marred by significant factual inaccuracies. For example, you state that in 1971 the ratio of both was 60%, which is mathematically impossible, and your description of the 1991 and 2001 data points is inconsistent with the provided chart. While you attempt to report the main features, the lack of precision in interpreting the data prevents a higher score. To improve, focus on accurately transcribing the figures and identifying the key turning points, such as the crossover period in the early 1970s.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized chronologically, which provides a basic logical structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive (e.g., 'In 1939', 'In 1953', 'In 1961'). There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect the trends or contrast the two categories effectively. Paragraphing is also insufficient; the entire body of the report is contained within one long paragraph, which hinders the flow of information. Using clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction from the overview and the detailed data analysis would significantly improve the readability and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic phrases like 'the ratio of' and 'accommodation'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'begining', 'accomodation', 'house holds', and 'continoucly'. Additionally, word choice is often awkward, such as 'aroundabout' and 'some how'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes that distract the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('in the begining, the year of 1918'), subject-verb agreement errors ('the owned and rented accommodation were same percentage'), and awkward phrasing ('the ratio of accommodation on rented were higher'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and unnecessary commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction limits the score. Focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and using more varied sentence structures, such as complex sentences with relative clauses.
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