Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph compares two households in accommodation in owned and rented in England and Wales in between the year 1918 and 2011.
Overall, the graph consist of X and Y axis. X axis consist of years from 1919 to 2011 whereas axis represent the percentage of households. Looking at rented accommodation in year 1918 it was the highest u where it was drastically declining after fluctuation in 2011. Furthermore in the year 2018 it was at the bottom in percentage but significantly achieve the success in 2011.
In 1918, the households in owned accommodation was at the peak level around 78%, then slightly decline around 69 % for next two year ( 1929 and 1961), then again drop to 59% in year 1961, from it shows significantly downfall in percentage at last it drops around 36% in year 2011, whereas it can seen that in year 1971 the households in owned and rented accommodation was uniform in percentage 50%.
In contrast, in year 2018 the percentage of households were on low scale it begin with 22% in year 1918 , then it was increased by 10% till 1953 from 1918. In year 1961 it was rise to 40% in 1961. Moving to next years it grows significantly to 79% in 2001 and then it modestly drops in year 2011 by 65% approximately.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarize the main features, but the data interpretation is significantly flawed. You have confused the categories and years, such as stating that rented accommodation was at the bottom in 2018 (the chart ends in 2011) and misinterpreting the trends for owned versus rented housing. The overview is also weak, as it describes the graph's physical structure (X and Y axes) rather than summarizing the key trends. To improve, focus on identifying the major shifts, such as the crossover point in 1971 and the overall inverse relationship between the two categories, while ensuring data accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by inaccurate data reporting and confusing transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'In contrast', they are often used to introduce contradictory or incorrect information. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall flow is disrupted by the factual errors regarding the years and percentages. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that your linking words accurately reflect the relationship between the data points you are describing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'highest', 'bottom', and 'increase'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'significantly achieve the success' and 'uniform in percentage', which do not accurately describe statistical trends. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and ensure these are used in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('graph consist', 'X axis consist'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often marred by errors, such as 'from it shows significantly downfall'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around parentheses and commas. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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