Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart compares the percentage of residence in owned and the rented households in England and Wale between 1918 and 2011.Overall the households that are owned and some that are rented in the tenure of different years from 1918 to 2011 is provided.
By diving deep in the given information it can be seen that the ratio of households in rented accommodation and owned accommodation in the years of 1939 and 1953 are almost at the same point that is above 30. Moreover it seems that the both accommmodations in 1971 are parallel. Furthermore the ratio of residence in owned accommodation in 1991 and 2001 are approximately at the same point while the rented one is decreased .In 1981 the ratio of rented one is almost 40 percent the owned houses have approxi8mately 60 percent. while in 1961 the 40 percent of people uses owned accommodation while 59 percent people preferred rented accomodation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends, such as the long-term shift from renting to owning. The description of the data is fragmented and lacks a logical selection of key features. For instance, the mention of specific years like 1939 and 1953 is somewhat arbitrary, and the analysis of the trends is confusing. The report does not effectively compare the two categories across the entire period, resulting in a response that is only partially developed. To improve, you should identify the overall trend (e.g., the rise in home ownership) and group data points logically rather than listing them year by year.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction, the body paragraphs are not clearly demarcated, and the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'In addition', but they are often applied mechanically or to link unrelated points. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track which data point is being discussed. Paragraphing is insufficient, as the entire analysis is compressed into a single, dense block of text, which hinders the logical flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'ratio', 'point', and 'accommodation'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'residence in owned and the rented households' and 'the rented one is decreased'. The phrasing 'diving deep in the given information' is informal and inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'surpassed', or 'a significant increase', and ensure that your terminology is used accurately in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the ratio... are' and 'the 40 percent of people uses'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and unnecessary capitalization. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex constructions. For example, 'the households that are owned and some that are rented in the tenure of different years... is provided' is grammatically awkward and unclear. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your score.
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