Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given below bar graph illustrate the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overview of this chart is, households in owned accommodation was highest in year 2001 with 69 percentage and households in rented accommodation had highest 78 percentage in the year 1918.
Households owning and renting accommodation had their reports in the bar graph with percentages between 0 to 90 and years between 1918 to 2011. The colour grey was illustrated the reports of households in owned accommodation and Black colour was reported of households in rented accommodation.The year 1918 owned accommodation was at lowest percentages (22 %) whereas rented accommodation was the highest in percentages (78%). The year 1917 had illustrated the same percentages of households owned and rented accommodation both had 50%.Households in owned accommodation was highest in the year 2001 with 69 percentage and households in rented accommodation had lowest 31 percentage.
The comparison between households owning and renting accommodation,whereas renting had decreased after 1961 till 2011 and owning had increased after 1971 till 2011.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features, such as the trends in owned and rented accommodation. However, the analysis is hampered by significant factual inaccuracies. For instance, you mention the year 1917, which is not present in the data, and you state that in 1918, both categories were at 50%, which contradicts the chart. While you identify the highest and lowest points, the lack of precision in reporting the data points and the inclusion of non-existent years prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you carefully read the axes and data points before drafting your summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The second paragraph is a disjointed collection of observations rather than a cohesive overview. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'The year...'. Transitions between ideas are abrupt, making the progression of the argument difficult to follow. To improve, use linking words like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to connect your sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on phrases like 'households in owned accommodation' and 'percentage'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'The colour grey was illustrated the reports', which is grammatically awkward and imprecise. You should aim to use a wider range of synonyms and more sophisticated reporting verbs to describe the trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a decline', or 'experienced a surge'. Expanding your vocabulary will help you convey information more precisely and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('graph illustrate', 'colour grey was illustrated') and awkward sentence structures ('Households in owned accommodation was highest'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and unnecessary capitalization. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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