Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar graph given below was compared and contrasts the percentage data of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overview of graph from 1918 -2011 was observed households in owned accommodation was gradually increased till 2001 but slight decrease in 2011 whereas in households in rented was peaked in 1918 followed by decrease in trend till 2001 and increased by 5% in 2011.
Furthermore, in comparison of percentage versus year of household stay in England and whales was 23% in 1918 and depicts constant in 1939 and 1953 which is 32% ,slight increase in 1961 up to 40% , 50% in 1971, and 60% in 1981 and in [redacted phone] achieved peak which was almost 68% followed by slight fall in 2011 which is 65%.
On the other hand, household in rented stay peaked more compared to owned stay. In those years rented stay were more in 1918 in England and Whales rented stay was 77% followed by 68% in 1939 to 1953, a sudden fall in which was 59% in 1961 followed by 9-10% decrease compared to 1961 for next decades till 2001, but sudden increase in 2011 up to 36%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the data, including the trends for both owned and rented accommodation. You successfully identified the peak years and the overall shift in housing patterns. However, the report lacks a clear, cohesive overview paragraph; the summary is embedded within the introduction and body, which makes it harder to follow. Additionally, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting, such as the claim that rented accommodation was 77% in 1918, which is not clearly supported by the visual trend. To improve, ensure you clearly separate your overview from the detailed data analysis and double-check your data points against the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions. For example, the phrase 'Furthermore, in comparison of percentage versus year' is clunky and does not effectively link the ideas. The use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical, and the referencing (e.g., 'in those years') is occasionally unclear. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows naturally into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. You rely on repetitive structures like 'was' and 'in' to describe data points. There are also some noticeable errors in word choice, such as 'depicts constant' instead of 'remained constant' and the misspelling of 'Wales' as 'whales'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied verbs for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', or 'stabilized', and ensure you are using collocations correctly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'households in owned accommodation was gradually increased'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction. For instance, 'The bar graph given below was compared and contrasts' is grammatically incorrect. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement.
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