Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart demonstrate the households in owned accommodation and households in rented accommodation in england and wales around 1918 and 2011.
In information about showed after the charted in maximum of households in owned of 2001 in the 69% to for highest of households and 1991 in increase to 67% of households. In addition 2011 in 65% of the ten year after normally fall of 2% of households in owned.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 71 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The summary lacks a clear overview of the main trends, such as the long-term shift from rented to owned accommodation. The data selection is fragmented, focusing only on specific years (2001, 1991, 2011) without providing a comprehensive summary of the period between 1918 and 2011. The lack of sufficient detail and the failure to meet the length requirement significantly impact the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a logical structure. The sentences are disjointed, and the progression of ideas is unclear. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link the data points effectively. For example, the phrase 'In information about showed after the charted' is grammatically incoherent, making it difficult to follow the writer's intent. Paragraphing is absent, and the overall arrangement of information does not facilitate a clear summary of the chart's features.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'households', 'owned', and 'rented', and struggles to use them in correct collocations. There are significant errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'normally fall of 2% of households', which obscures the meaning. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately or to demonstrate any flexibility in expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The bar chart demonstrate'), incorrect preposition usage, and fragmented sentence structures. The attempt to describe the data results in non-standard English, such as 'In information about showed after the charted'. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read.
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