Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart outlines the proportion of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and wales from 1918 and 2011.

In general, we can see that the percentage of households in their own place has experienced a sharp rise in all years. By contrast, proportion of households in renting accommodation has fell to a low across the years.

Regarding households in owned place, there was 22% in 1918, 32% in 1939 and 1953 followed by 40% in 1961 and 50% in 1971 coming to next 60% in 1981 and 68% in 1991 and 2001 then starts little fall about 65% in 2011.

On the other hand, households things in rented accommodation are significantly decreased in percentage in all years. For example; 77% in 1918, 69% in 1939 and remain stable in 1953 followed by 59% in 1961 and 50% in 1971 succeeded by 40% in 1981 and 31% in 1991 followed by 31% in 2001 and 35% in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task and identifies the main trends effectively. You have successfully highlighted the inverse relationship between owned and rented accommodation over the period. The overview is clear, and the data points are generally accurate. However, the report could be improved by grouping the data more analytically rather than listing figures chronologically. For instance, noting the 'tipping point' around 1971 where the percentages crossed would add depth. The summary is sufficient, but more focus on the overall shift rather than just listing numbers would elevate the response to a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs for each category. Cohesive devices such as 'In general', 'By contrast', and 'On the other hand' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'succeeded by' or 'coming to next'. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking phrases would help the response move more naturally between the data points provided.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the trends clearly. You use terms like 'sharp rise', 'significantly decreased', and 'remain stable' appropriately. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'households things' and 'their own place', which sound slightly unnatural in an academic context. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing. The range is sufficient to convey the information, but lacks the sophistication required for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'renting accommodation has fell' (should be 'has fallen') and 'from 1918 and 2011' (should be 'between 1918 and 2011'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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