Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart illustrates the proportion of households that owned or rented homes in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall, the rented household ownership considerably reduced in 2001. Conversely, the demand for own household is less as compares with rented homes. However, it's demand is seems to be rose sharply with approximately 70% by 2001 as people prefer to have their own property.

In 1918, the rented properties are at peek such as holding around 78% of household utilities. In 1939 and 1953 holds the same ratio by near around 68%. On the other side, initially the owned properties only have around 23% of household share and then by gradually increasing it mark the 40% during 1961. Nevertheless, the proportion of both the households become same during 1971 with 50%. However, with the time ownership of rented apartments experienced a downward trend 40% in 1981 and 32% in 1991. In 2011 year, it gradually reach 35%. Meanwhile, the ratio of owned accommodation increase significantly reach around 70% in 2001. During 2011, it dropped from 70% to 65%. But remain the higher share as compares with the rented accommodation.

Overall, people invested and prefer to have own houses during 2011 instead of rented property.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the key trends for both owned and rented accommodation. However, there are inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that rented household ownership 'considerably reduced in 2001' and that the ratio of owned accommodation reached 70% in 2001, which is generally accurate, but the overall summary is slightly confused by phrasing like 'the demand for own household is less as compares with rented homes' which contradicts the data shown. While you successfully identify the crossover point in 1971, the analysis lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the entire period, and some data points are described with imprecise terminology.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'On the other side' and 'Nevertheless' are used to connect sentences, but they do not always logically link the preceding information. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'In 1939 and 1953 holds the same ratio', where the subject is missing. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the final sentence feels like a repetitive summary rather than a concluding synthesis of the main trends.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. You rely on basic verbs like 'reduce', 'rose', and 'increase'. There are also several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'rented household ownership', 'at peek', and 'household utilities' (when referring to housing tenure). These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly opaque. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'tenure', 'fluctuated', or 'surpassed', and ensure that your collocations are natural and contextually appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('it's demand is seems to be rose'), incorrect verb tenses ('it gradually reach'), and missing articles or prepositions. The sentence structure is often fragmented, which hinders the flow of the writing. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar—such as 'the rented properties are at peek' instead of 'rented properties were at their peak'—prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. More attention to proofreading for basic tense consistency is required.

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