Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of households owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, there was a significant shift of households from renting to owing in the last 93 years. In the first 43 years, renting was on top, but in one period (1971), both were in equal proportion.

In 1918, renting households surpassed the owning by a huge margin of around 50%. The figures in 1939 and 1953 remained similar because owing was at 30% and renting at around 70%. In 1961, the figures for renting and owing were around 60% and around 40%, respectively, as compared to 1971, where the figures for both were the same at 50%.

In contrast,from 1981 the trend changed and owing increased significantly. The figures for 1981,1991,2001 and 2011 in terms of owing were 60,around 70,around 70 and around 60%, respectively.The proportion for 1981,1991,2001 and 2011 about renting accommodation were 40,around 30,around 30 and around 35%,respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the chart well. You successfully identified the overall trend of the shift from renting to owning and highlighted the key crossover point in 1971. The data is generally accurate, and you have made relevant comparisons between the two categories. To reach a higher band, ensure that you avoid listing data points in a repetitive manner. For instance, the final paragraph lists figures for four different years in a row; instead, group these into broader trends or periods to demonstrate a more analytical approach to the data provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose (introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs). You use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast' and 'Overall' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, the final paragraph relies heavily on a list-like structure, which makes the flow feel a bit repetitive. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring that sentences connect more fluidly would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'surpassed', and 'significant shift'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies and spelling errors, such as 'owing' instead of 'owning' and 'on top' which is too informal for an academic report. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and avoid repeating the same words (like 'figures') too frequently. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied ways to describe trends and changes would help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('surpassed the owning') and punctuation issues, particularly with spacing after commas (e.g., 'In contrast,from'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are noticeable. To improve, focus on proofreading for small mechanical errors and try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or participial phrases to combine information more effectively.

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