Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the rate of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall, it can be seen that household in rented was higher while owned was lower at the same year. Another, owned was higher while rented was lower at another year.
In 1918, the rate of rented households was very higher from others which was 77%. These rate still remain similar from 1939 to 1953 with 68%. These rate was consiquently down from 1961 to 2001 which were 59%, 50%, 40%, 32%, 31%. In 2011, this rare slightly increased and reached 36% almost.
In 1918, the rate of owned households was very lower which was 22%. In 1939 and 1963 these rate were similar with 32%. In 1961, this rate was increased with 40%. But 1971, the owned and rented remain same which was 50%. From 1981 to 2001, these rate was increased which were 60%, 68% and 69%. On the other hand, this rate down which was 64%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the initial dominance of rented accommodation and the subsequent shift toward home ownership. However, the overview is poorly constructed and lacks clarity, failing to highlight the most significant trends effectively. The description of the data is somewhat mechanical, listing figures without sufficient synthesis or comparison. While the key data points are present, the analysis is hampered by inaccurate reporting of years (e.g., mentioning 1963 when the chart shows 1953) and a lack of clear, logical grouping of the information. To improve, focus on identifying the 'crossover' point more clearly and grouping the data into distinct periods of change.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often repetitive and sometimes inaccurate. Phrases like 'These rate' and 'this rate' are used frequently, which makes the writing feel mechanical. The logical progression between sentences is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing, such as in the overview where the comparison between owned and rented accommodation is confusingly stated. The transition between the description of rented and owned households is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') would help create a smoother flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'rate', 'higher', 'lower', and 'increased'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'accomodation' and 'consiquently', and word choice issues, such as 'this rare' instead of 'this rate'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate precision or flexibility. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider variety of verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'declined', 'surpassed', or 'proportion', and ensure that spelling is accurate throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'These rate was', 'household in rented was') and pluralisation. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that can cause confusion. Punctuation is mostly functional, but the misuse of basic grammar patterns significantly impacts the clarity of the writing. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and ensuring that plural nouns are used correctly with their corresponding verbs. Practising the correct use of articles and prepositions will also help reduce the frequency of errors.
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