Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates, the percentage of households which are owned and rented on the bases of accommodation between the years 1918 to 2011.

The, households owned in the year 1918 started from the proportion around twenty percent, the year 1939 and 1953 were in a same flow up to thirty percent. In 1961, a gradual increase is found to forty percent. The owned houses reached to fifty percent in 1971 and slightly increased to sixty percent in the year 1981. The years 1991 and 2001 were exactly the same in the proportion of seventy percent. It then dropped down around sixty-five percent in the households owned accommodation.

Households which are rented on accommodation peaked in the year 1918 which almost reached to eighty percent. It depicted below seventy percent and following the same proportion in the year 1953. The rented houses continuously reduced by ten percent in each years till 1981. However, in the year 1991 and 2001 the proportion remained steady around thirty-two percent. It then made a slight grow in the year 2011 between thirty and forty percent.

Overall, the households owned is quite opposite among the households rented in accommodation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the trends for both owned and rented accommodation. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesising them into a cohesive overview. While the key trends are identified, the comparison between the two categories could be more explicit. The overview provided at the end is very brief and lacks sufficient detail to fully satisfy the requirement for a clear summary of the main trends. To improve, focus on grouping data points to highlight significant changes rather than listing every year individually.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and occasionally mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'in the year'. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, and the logical flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'meanwhile', 'subsequently'). The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure feels like a list of facts rather than a well-integrated report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe the trends using terms like 'peaked', 'gradual increase', and 'steady'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'on the bases of accommodation' and 'made a slight grow'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and the repetition of basic phrases restricts the ability to convey the information with more precision. Expanding the range of synonyms for describing trends would improve the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'the households owned in the year 1918 started from the proportion around twenty percent' and 'the rented houses continuously reduced by ten percent in each years'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas appearing in several places. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score.

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