Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Hello,
The given data shows the amount of households in owned and rented divisions in England and Wales between 1918 to 2011
The decade of 1961-71 shows a sudden change in household systems
Before 1961 the percentage of rented accommodation was higher than the owned accommodations which falls in 1971 and after that percentage of owned accommodations remains higher than rented accommodation households
The highest percentage of rented accommodation was in the year 1918 and lowest in 2001
On the other hand the highest owned accommodation was in the year 2001 and lowest in 1918 which is vice versa of rented households
As the the decades pass the amount of owned accommodation shows a rise and on the other side the graph of rented households shows a certain amount of fall in as the decades pass
due to which we can conclude that both the household accommodations shows inverse relationship
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a basic overview of the trends, identifying the inverse relationship between owned and rented accommodation. However, it lacks a clear, analytical approach. While it mentions the 1961-71 period, it fails to provide specific data points (percentages) from the chart to support the descriptions. The summary is somewhat repetitive, and the 'main features' are not highlighted with sufficient precision. To improve, you should incorporate specific figures from the graph to substantiate your claims and ensure the overview is more comprehensive by contrasting the start and end points of the period more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks formal paragraphing, which is essential for a structured report. The flow of ideas is somewhat mechanical, relying on simple transitions like 'On the other hand' and 'due to which'. There is a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas smoothly. The progression of information is logical in a broad sense, but the lack of clear paragraph breaks makes the text feel like a single block of information rather than a well-organized report. Using more varied linking words and grouping related information into distinct paragraphs would significantly improve the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is functional but limited and repetitive. Phrases such as 'amount of households' and 'percentage of owned accommodations' are used repeatedly. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or precise collocations. For instance, instead of 'amount of households', terms like 'proportion of households' or 'housing tenure' would be more appropriate for an academic task. The word choice is generally accurate enough to convey meaning, but it lacks the range and flexibility required for higher band scores. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic synonyms is recommended.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Examples include 'between 1918 to 2011' (should be 'between 1918 and 2011'), 'which falls in 1971' (incorrect verb tense/usage), and 'as the the decades pass' (repetition). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with a lack of commas to separate clauses. To achieve a higher score, you need to demonstrate a wider variety of complex sentence structures and improve your control over basic grammar, particularly subject-verb agreement and prepositional usage.
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