Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given chart illustrates the proportion of families who had rented and owned accommodation in england and wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overall, it can be seen that the highest percentage of households used rented accommodation, whereas only 22% had their own acccommodation in 1918. After long time, the accommodation pattern changed completely in 2011, while most of the people had their own accommodation on that time.
In 1918, only 22% families had their own home and 75% families stayed in ranted houses. After 2 decades, 32% families stayed in their own home also 67% stayed in ranted houses in 1939. In addition, the both number is quite similar in 1953. In 1961, personal accommodation increased to 40% and ranted houses proportion droped to 57%, whereas in 1971, both accommodation number was same with 50% each.
On the other hand , the next 3 decades personal accommodation increased to 60%, 67% and 68% respectively, while uses of rented houses proportion droped to 40%, 33% and 32% respectively. In 2011, after long time rented houses user increased slightly. 35% families stayed in rented accommodation and 64% had their own accommodation that year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the chart well. You have successfully identified the key trends, such as the inversion of the two categories over the period and the crossover point in 1971. The overview is clear and highlights the significant shift in housing patterns. However, the response could be improved by being more precise with data points; for example, describing the 1953 data as 'quite similar' is vague when the chart provides specific figures. Additionally, ensure that all years are covered accurately, as the description of the final period is slightly confusing regarding the slight increase in rented accommodation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'In addition', 'On the other hand', and 'respectively', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical or repetitive. For instance, the phrase 'After long time' is used twice and is not a natural way to introduce a time period. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the both number') is more precise would help elevate the score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main trends, using terms like 'proportion', 'accommodation', and 'respectively'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'acccommodation', 'ranted' (instead of rented), and 'droped' (instead of dropped). These errors are noticeable but do not impede overall communication. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise collocations and ensure accurate spelling of key terms related to the task. The use of 'personal accommodation' is acceptable, but 'owner-occupied' would be more idiomatic in this context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'most of the people had their own accommodation on that time' (should be 'at that time') and 'the both number is quite similar' (should be 'both figures were similar'). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are occasionally inconsistent. While you attempt to use complex structures, the frequency of these minor errors prevents a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical slips would significantly improve your accuracy.
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