Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the given bar chart elucidates the percentage of households owned and rented accommodation in England and wales between 1918 to 2011 overall its a clear differences among the categories shown in chart in 1918 22 percent households owned and the huge number 78 percent accommodation was rented 1939 and 1953 these years was same percentage off households 32 percent owned and 68 percent accommodations was rented in 1961 40 percent accommodations was owned and 58 percent was rented in 1971 50 percent owned households and 50 percent rented in 1981 60 percent owned and 40 percent rented in 1991 and 2001 both years was almost same amount of percentage 68 percent owned and 32 percent rented at the end off this chart 2011 64 percent households was owned and 35 percent was rented this chart show the report off household accommodation following the chart after 1971 more house holds are owned

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main trends and provides data points for the years mentioned. However, it lacks a clear structure, such as an introduction or a summary paragraph, and is presented as a single block of text. While the main features are identified, the lack of paragraphing and the repetitive listing of data points hinder the development of a cohesive overview. To improve, you should group the data into logical trends (e.g., the steady rise of home ownership until 2001) rather than listing every year individually, which makes the report feel like a mechanical data dump rather than an analytical summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which is essential for a clear IELTS report. The text is a single, run-on paragraph, making it difficult to follow the progression of information. There is a lack of cohesive devices; sentences are joined by simple juxtaposition rather than linking words or transition phrases. For example, the transition between the data points is abrupt, and the lack of punctuation makes it hard to distinguish where one idea ends and another begins. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks and transition words like 'In contrast,' 'Subsequently,' or 'Furthermore' to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'percentage of households' and 'accommodations was rented/owned.' There is little attempt to use a variety of synonyms or more sophisticated vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated,' 'peaked,' 'remained stable,' 'declined'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of lexical variety prevents the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, try to vary your verbs and nouns, and focus on using more precise terminology related to data reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'these years was same,' 'households was owned') and missing articles. The sentence structure is simplistic, consisting mostly of short, repetitive clauses. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the absence of proper punctuation (periods and commas) makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and use punctuation to separate distinct ideas. Practicing the use of complex sentences with subordinating conjunctions will also help improve your score.

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