Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given chart illustrates the proportion of Residenatal area own and rented accommodation in England and wales for 1918 to 2011.
overall, it is evident that rented accommodation reach on your peak and landlord remain second place
in 1918 owner are at 22% or rented appartment more than 50% remain 78% followed by chart in 1939 to 1961 owner and rented house are 32% or 68% after 15 years remain staible .while in 1971 owner of house slightly increased at simillar percentage both side.in 1981 owner increased noticable change at 60% or rented house at 40%.
following the chart in 1991 dip rented appartment at 32% or owner are
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the summary is incomplete; the text cuts off abruptly in the final sentence, leaving the data analysis unfinished. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the lack of a complete overview and the failure to cover the full period up to 2011 mean that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, comprehensive summary of the main trends and complete your sentences to provide a full report of the data provided in the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the response is weak. There is no clear paragraphing, and the flow of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often inaccurate, such as the confusing use of 'followed by chart' and 'after 15 years remain staible'. The lack of logical progression makes it difficult for the reader to follow the trends over time. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction/overview from the body paragraphs, and use transition words like 'subsequently', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' to connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Residenatal', 'appartment', and 'staible'. You rely on basic descriptors and struggle to use precise terminology to describe the data. For example, 'owner are at 22%' is not an accurate way to describe statistical trends. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary for describing charts, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained constant', and 'a significant increase'. Additionally, ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'owner are at 22%'), incorrect verb tenses, and fragmented sentences. The sentence structure is repetitive and lacks complexity. Many sentences are difficult to parse due to missing articles and incorrect prepositions. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring that your subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles (a/an/the). Reviewing basic punctuation and capitalization rules will also help improve the clarity of your writing.
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