Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given repersantion demonstrates the percentage of owned and rented household accommodation in England in the time period of 1918 to 2011.
To begin with the year 1918, there were 23% of owned houses and 77% of rentals. Whereas in year 1939 the amount of owned houses increased at 32% and rentals got decreased to 79%. Moving to the year 1953, both accommodation remaind constant at same percentage as 1939. 41% was of owned houses and rentals were at 59% in year 1961.
Moving further, in the year 1981, a huge change can be seen where owned accommodations had more percentage than rented ones at 60% and 40%, respectively. In year 1991 and 2001, there was a little change of 1% in both years, the rented ones were 32% and 68% in year 1981
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified some key features, the summary is incomplete as it stops abruptly before the end of the period (2011). Furthermore, there are factual inaccuracies in your reporting; for example, you state that in 1939 rentals 'got decreased to 79%', which is mathematically inconsistent with the 32% ownership figure provided. To improve, ensure you cover the entire timeframe provided in the prompt and double-check your data interpretation. The lack of a clear overview or summary of the main trends also limits the score, as you have focused primarily on listing individual data points rather than synthesizing the information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Moving further', but the progression of ideas is mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the final sentence which mentions '32% and 68% in year 1981', which contradicts your earlier statement about 1981. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your data points are linked logically to the overall trend rather than just listed. Improving the transition between sentences will help the reader follow your analysis more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'amount', 'percentage', and 'houses'. There are also spelling errors such as 'repersantion' and 'remaind'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'figure', 'fluctuated', or 'witnessed a significant rise'. Avoid using informal phrasing like 'got decreased'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations will help you convey information with greater precision and sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For instance, 'there were 23% of owned houses' is awkward; it would be better to say 'owned houses accounted for 23%'. You also have issues with preposition usage, such as 'increased at 32%' instead of 'increased to 32%'. While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by errors in tense or word order. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect prepositions will also help improve your accuracy.
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