Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The depicted graph shows the different ratio among in owned and rented buildings in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.lets analyse different aspects in following paragraphs. Households in rented houses remained high about 80 percent in 1918 as compared to owned houses .Then gradual decrease occured in rented houses and an increase occurred in households in owned years and remained constant in 1939 and 1953.In 1961 households in rented accomodations declined and increases occured in owned accomodations.The tendency of households remained constant in owned and rented accomodations in 1971.Afterward we see increase in households in owned accomodations till 2001 and decrease in 2011.Similarly we see decrease in households in 1991 and 2001 in rented accomodations and gradually an increase in 2011.On the other hand there is a constant increase in households in owned accomodations from 20 to 69 and gradual decrease to 65 percent.Simlarly decrease occured in households in rented accomodations from 78 to 31 percent in different years and rise in 2011 about 26 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the overall trends for owned and rented accommodation. However, the analysis is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While the key data points are mentioned, the description of the trends is occasionally confusing, particularly when discussing specific years. The response would benefit from a more structured approach, such as grouping the data by trend rather than listing years chronologically in a way that obscures the main comparison. The conclusion is essentially a restatement of data rather than a synthesis of the most significant changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks effective paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. The text is presented as a single block, and the transition between sentences is often mechanical or abrupt. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'On the other hand', 'Similarly'), they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. The logical flow is hindered by the repetitive nature of the reporting, and the lack of clear paragraph breaks makes the structure feel disjointed. Improved paragraphing would significantly enhance the clarity of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is limited and somewhat repetitive. Phrases like 'households in rented houses' and 'households in owned accomodations' are used repeatedly, which makes the writing feel monotonous. There are also spelling errors, such as 'accomodations' (should be 'accommodations') and 'occured' (should be 'occurred'). The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score. To improve, you should use synonyms and more sophisticated collocations to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a sharp decline', or 'remained relatively stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles ('in owned years'), incorrect prepositions, and punctuation errors. The sentence structure is often repetitive, relying heavily on 'there is' or 'we see' constructions. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and spelling is noticeable and occasionally distracts the reader. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage would help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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