Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar graph illustrates the ratio of household accommodation and rented accommodation, seen in two nation england and wales from 1918 to 2011.

Prima- facie, the percentage of households was witnessed 78%in 1918 then it remained the same from 1939 to 1953, accounting for 68%.It decreased by 28% between 1961 and 1991.Eventually,it escalated of11 % in last year

Turning to households in rented accommodation in england and in wales.the percentage increased from 32%in1939 to 22% in 1918.It was the same in next year (32%). The percentage was 50,60and 70 in 1961,1971 and in 1981, respectively. The percentage shows escalation 2 % between 1991 nad 2001. It dwindled by 10% in 2011.

To wrap up

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The data reporting is inaccurate; for instance, the description of the rented accommodation trends is confusing and does not align with the provided chart. The response lacks a proper conclusion and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the two categories. To improve, you must ensure all data points are accurately interpreted, provide a clear summary of the overall trends in an introduction or overview paragraph, and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks logical organization. The paragraphing is insufficient, with the second paragraph attempting to cover too much information in a disjointed manner. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as the abrupt transition 'To wrap up' followed by no content. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'subsequently', 'meanwhile') to connect ideas more fluidly and logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'ratio of household accommodation' and 'escalated of 11%'. The spelling errors, such as 'england' (should be capitalized) and 'nad', further detract from the quality of the writing. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate precision in describing trends. You should focus on learning specific collocations for describing data, such as 'a significant increase', 'a steady decline', or 'remained stable', and ensure you use these terms accurately in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect preposition usage, and punctuation errors. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper structure, such as 'The percentage was 50,60and 70 in 1961,1971 and in 1981, respectively.' The range of grammatical structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct capitalization and punctuation. Additionally, practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences to improve the flow and grammatical variety of your writing.

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