Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given bar graph illustrates the percentage of household in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales in 1918 and 2011.Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the highest percentage of owned and rented household was recorded in 2001 and 1918 respectively.Meanwhile, the lowest percentage of owned and rented household for accommodation was observed in 1918 and 2001 accordingly.
To begin with, a big difference was recorded in 1918 between owned and rented accommodation that was 22% and 78% respectively.With the passage of time, the percentage of owned accommodation has been increased significantly from 22% to 68% in 2001, becoming the highest percentage. After 2001, the percentage about owned houses has decreased slightly and became 62% in 2011.
On the other hand, the percentage of rented houses was the highest in 1918 (78%), but after this year it decreased drastically till 2001 making the lowest percentage (31%). Meanwhile , it remained constant between 1939 to 1953, 1991 to 2001 and in 1971.After 2001, rented percentage increased again and ranked itself at 33%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response successfully identifies the main trends and makes relevant comparisons between the two categories. You have highlighted the key turning points, such as the peak in owned accommodation in 2001 and the inverse relationship between the two categories over time. However, the overview could be more precise; for instance, stating that the highest percentage of owned households was in 2001 is accurate, but the reference to 1918 for rented accommodation is also correct. The data is generally well-selected, though some specific figures could be integrated more smoothly to support the comparison. Overall, you have addressed all parts of the task effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, a body paragraph for owned accommodation, and a body paragraph for rented accommodation. You use cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'To begin with', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be improved to avoid repetition. For example, the phrase 'the percentage about owned houses' is a bit clunky. The progression of ideas is generally clear, and the paragraphing is appropriate for this type of task.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'drastically', 'significantly', and 'constant'. There are some minor spelling errors, such as 'accomodation' (should be 'accommodation'), and some word choice issues, such as 'ranked itself at 33%'. While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, there are occasional inaccuracies in collocation. However, these errors do not impede communication, and the range is sufficient to convey the necessary information clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'With the passage of time, the percentage of owned accommodation has been increased'. There are some grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and passive voice usage (e.g., 'has been increased' should be 'has increased'). Additionally, there are some punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Meanwhile ,'). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear throughout the response, and the errors do not significantly impede the reader's understanding.
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