Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given chart illustrate the percentage of household owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales during the time frame 1918 to 2011.

Overall, it can be seen the number of people where renting the accommodation is more in 1918 than the owned accommodation. And after the 1981 number of household owned started increasing and the renting an accommodation got decreased.

The percentage of households rented where upto 80% in 1918 while owned accommodation was in 20% and the number of people renting a home started decreasing and household in owned accommodation started increasing and by 1971 both of the index came to a same point at 50 % .

In 1981 the household owned surplus the index of people renting a house by 20% and by 2011 the proportion of owning a accommodation was the highest and number of people to rent a house was the lowest by standing at 60% and 35% index.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main trends and provides relevant data points to support the description. You successfully identified the starting point, the crossover in 1971, and the final figures in 2011. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, and the overview could be more clearly integrated. While you mention the trends, the description of the 1981 period is slightly confusing, as you state the owned accommodation 'surplus' the index, which is a misuse of terminology. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more precise and that the overview highlights the most significant shifts rather than just listing chronological changes.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of the data. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and occasionally mechanical (e.g., 'And after the 1981', 'In 1981'). The transition between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow of information. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the internal cohesion within paragraphs lacks variety, relying heavily on simple conjunctions. To improve, try using a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more naturally and show the relationship between the data points more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations. For example, 'surplus' is used as a verb where 'surpassed' or 'exceeded' would be correct. Additionally, phrases like 'both of the index came to a same point' are unnatural. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic terms like 'number of people' and 'increasing'. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', or 'trend', and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The given chart illustrate', 'number of household owned started') and incorrect verb forms ('where renting', 'renting an accommodation got decreased'). While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are persistent and distract from the quality of the writing. The sentence structures are relatively simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Increasing the variety of sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will also help raise your score.

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