Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The presented chart illustrates the proportion of domestic units in personally owned and leased residential in England and Wales from 1918- 2011. Overall, the percentage of rented houses has decreased considerably during the period and the proportion of households in owned accommodation has increased noticeably from [redacted phone].
The highest percentage of family units in leased accommodation shows in 1918. It is recorded more than 70%. The lowest number of percentage shows in 2001.It is indicated as 30%. The highest amount of households in owned accommodation illustrates in 2001. It is closely near by 70%. the minimum percentage of domestic units in owned housing presents in 1918. it is indicated as more than 20%.
Especially, equal amount of percentage shows in both categories in 1971. By contrast, the chart presented that the amount of households in owned accommodation has increased more than past.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a general overview and identifies key trends, such as the inverse relationship between owned and rented accommodation. However, the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While the main features are highlighted, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the 1971 crossover point is brief, and the concluding sentence is vague ('increased more than past'). To improve, you should provide more detailed comparisons and ensure the response is sufficiently long to fully cover the data provided in the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into three short paragraphs, which is a logical structure for a report. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and somewhat mechanical. Phrases like 'The highest percentage... shows in 1918' and 'It is recorded...' are repetitive. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas smoothly between sentences. While the progression of information is generally clear, the reliance on simple sentence structures and repetitive phrasing hinders the flow of the response. Improving the variety of transition signals would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You use terms like 'domestic units' and 'leased residential' correctly, but there is noticeable repetition of basic verbs such as 'shows', 'recorded', and 'indicated'. Some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'leased residential' instead of 'rented accommodation'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'surpassed', and avoid repeating the same sentence structures to describe data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are some attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors or awkward phrasing, such as 'The highest percentage of family units in leased accommodation shows in 1918'. There are also issues with article usage and punctuation, such as 'the minimum percentage... presents in 1918. it is indicated...'. The frequent errors in basic grammar and the lack of a wider range of complex structures limit the score. Focusing on sentence variety and proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.
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