Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates persentage of households owning and rented accomodation in England and wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overall, rented accomodation increses gradully throughout the period while owned accomodation slightly increses modest rise throughout the same period - rented accomodation has the highest persetage in this chart.
In 1918, rented accomodation Slightly incresed by 78% compering to the owned accomodation around 22%. In 1939 to 1953 rented and owned accomodation were around 32% and 67% recpectivily. In Addtion rented accomodation decreased gradully by 58% and owned one increased till reaching 40% in 1961. In 1971 the two ffigures were equal with 50% of houshold owning and renting accomodation
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the summary of the data is inaccurate; for instance, you state that rented accommodation 'increases gradually' throughout the period, which contradicts the chart showing a clear long-term decline. The overview is confusing and lacks a clear grasp of the main trends. While you attempt to select some data points, the analysis is incomplete, and the failure to reach the word count means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you carefully interpret the trends before writing and provide a more comprehensive summary of the data provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as 'In Addtion' (which is misspelled) and 'recpectivily'. The logical flow between sentences is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two categories over time. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'subsequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping data by time periods or trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
There are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'persentage', 'accomodation', 'increses', 'gradully', and 'recpectivily'. These errors are distracting and occasionally impede communication. The range of vocabulary is quite limited, relying on basic terms to describe the data. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a more varied vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', or 'remained stable', and pay closer attention to the spelling of common academic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains numerous grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. For example, 'rented accomodation increses gradully' should be 'rented accommodation increased gradually'. There is also confusion regarding the use of prepositions and numbers, such as 'increased by 78% compering to the owned accomodation around 22%'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the lack of control over basic grammar, combined with frequent errors, makes the writing difficult to read. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for tense consistency.
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