Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart, mentions the proportions, of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between the years 1918 and 2011.
Overall, households in, rented accommodation encoutered a dramatic decrease then a then a slight rise. On the other hand, households in owned accommodation recorded a shop increase then a steady fall.
At 1918, the percentage of households in owned accommodation was around 76%, then declined slightly to reach approximately 68% and leveled off untill 1953. After that, it fall dramatically to reach 31% at 2001 and, the increased slightly to 35% at 2011.
The bar chart, mentions the proportions, of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between the years 1918 and 2011.
Overall, households in, rented accommodation encoutered a dramatic decrease then a then a slight rise. On the other hand, households in owned accommodation recorded a shap increase then a steady fall.
At 1918, the percentage of households in owned accommodation was around 76% then declined slightly to reach approximately 68% and leveled off untill 1953. After that, it fall dramatically to reach 31% at 2001 and the increased slightly to 35% at 2011. Whereas, the proportions of households in rented accommodation
was 23% and then recorded a
a sharp rise to reach 69% at
2001 before experiencing a steady
fall to reach 65% at 2011
where it became the dominant
one
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the trends for both owned and rented accommodation. However, there is a significant issue with the accuracy of the data interpretation. You stated that owned accommodation started at 76% and rented at 23%, which contradicts the visual data provided in the chart. Furthermore, the report includes a repetitive section where the first two paragraphs are restated, which negatively impacts the overall task completion. While you have identified the key trends, the factual errors regarding the starting percentages and the inclusion of redundant text prevent a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay suffers from poor structural management. The most significant issue is the repetition of the introduction and the first two paragraphs, which disrupts the flow and logical progression of the response. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand' and 'Whereas', the mechanical repetition of text makes the essay feel disjointed. Paragraphing is present, but the content within the paragraphs is not well-organized due to the redundant text. To improve, ensure that you proofread your work to avoid duplicating entire sections and focus on a clear, linear progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportions', 'accommodations', 'dramatic decrease', and 'dominant'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'encoutered' instead of 'encountered', 'untill' instead of 'until', and 'shap' instead of 'sharp'. Additionally, there are some awkward word choices and phrasing issues. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, the frequent spelling mistakes and the repetitive nature of the text limit the score. Focusing on accurate spelling and avoiding redundant phrasing will help improve your lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'At 1918' (should be 'In 1918'), 'it fall dramatically' (should be 'it fell'), and 'the increased slightly' (should be 'then increased'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas used throughout the text, such as in 'The bar chart, mentions the proportions, of households'. These errors are frequent and distract from the clarity of the writing. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and more precise punctuation.
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