Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart below illustrate the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall, households owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales 1918 to 2011,the percentage of household in 1918 households in owned accommodation is probably 23 percentage moreover rented accommodation is 78 percentage that illustrate accommodation of households in owned and rented.

The households in England rented accommodation is high in 1918 but rented accommodation it comes to below time by time that good to but in 1971 the rented accommodation is same like the households of rented or owned accommodation in 1971 is 50 percentage while the main thing is that rented and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to identify the main trends, the description is incomplete and cuts off abruptly at the end. The data interpretation is also imprecise, with phrases like 'probably 23 percentage' indicating a lack of clear reporting. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed, provide a complete overview, and include sufficient data points to support your summary. The current response is too brief to provide a clear, developed account of the trends shown in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure and clear progression. The paragraphs are poorly formed, and the transition between ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences, making the text difficult to follow. For example, the phrase 'that good to but in 1971' is confusing and lacks grammatical connection to the previous clause. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing—one for the introduction/overview and one or two for the body—and employ linking words like 'however,' 'consequently,' or 'in contrast' to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'percentage' and 'accommodation' throughout the text. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'below time by time,' which is not a standard English expression. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, you should incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained steady,' or 'proportion,' and avoid repeating the same phrases in every sentence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The chart below illustrate'), incorrect sentence structure, and missing articles. The sentence 'the percentage of household in 1918 households in owned accommodation is probably 23 percentage' is syntactically confused and difficult to parse. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practice using complex structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to add variety.

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