Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The stipulated bar graph reveals the information about owned and rented accommodation in England and wales in 1918 to 2011. The data is many figures etc.

Overall, it is crystal clear that maximum number 77 and minimum is 21 in this bar graph.

Having a myopic look, it becomes lucid that the graph has categories of one is households is owned accommodation and in 1918 has lowest value which is about 21% and highest value in 2001 which has 69% also has equal value in the year 1971 has 50%.

Furthermore, it can be vividly seen that the second category in this graph is households in rented accommodation has highest value in the year 1981 and the number is 78% on the other hand lowest value is31% in the year 2001. Moreover its has many other valuable things for example it also has same value like in 1971 has 50%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The overview is confusing, citing arbitrary numbers rather than identifying the main trends, such as the inversion of the two categories over time. The description of the data is inaccurate; for example, stating that owned accommodation reached 69% in 2001 is incorrect based on the provided chart. Furthermore, the response lacks a logical selection of features, focusing on isolated points rather than the overall progression. The analysis is underdeveloped and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the two categories, which is essential for a high-scoring Task 1 response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Furthermore' and 'Moreover', they are often used inappropriately or to introduce irrelevant information. The referencing is unclear, and the structure of the sentences makes it difficult to follow the writer's logic. The attempt at an overview is disconnected from the body paragraphs, and the overall flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of logical sequencing of the data points presented.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'Having a myopic look' and 'it becomes lucid' are unnatural and inappropriate for an academic report. There is significant repetition of basic structures and a lack of precision in describing trends (e.g., 'many other valuable things'). The word choice is often imprecise, which occasionally causes confusion for the reader. To improve, the student needs to focus on using accurate terminology for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', rather than relying on informal or overly complex, misused vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'its has many other'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'the graph has categories of one is households'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after punctuation marks (e.g., 'is31%'). The lack of control over basic sentence structure makes the text difficult to read and significantly lowers the overall quality of the writing.

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