Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates that percentage of the households and renting for individuals accommodation in England and wales in1918 and 2011.

The bar chart shows that can be compares for different years in England households owning percentage and accommodation percentage and wales in England. It can be compare for two years only.

Firstly, this chart on household owners charges for rented for individuals accommodation and we will discussed increased or decreased bar chart for past years. In 1918, the bar chart shows that household is owner accommodation percentage is approximately 22%,Moreover, It can below in this year. It can rose up time by time, and increased in 1991 and in last it can approximately 65% in 2011.

Secondly, in 1918 the percentage of the households in rented accommodation for the individuals is highly approximately 88%. After some years it can continued decreased, such as 1981 it is 40% and after many years it can hold on approximately 39% in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by describing the trends in owned and rented accommodation. However, the overview is missing, and the information is presented in a fragmented manner. While the key data points (1918 and 2011) are mentioned, the comparison between the two categories is not clearly articulated. The response struggles to select the main features effectively, often focusing on individual years rather than the overall trend. To improve, you must include a clear summary paragraph that highlights the main trends, such as the inverse relationship between the two categories over the period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' which do not logically connect the data points. Referencing is also problematic; for example, 'it can rose up' and 'it can continued decreased' are confusing and make the flow of information difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'it can rose up' and 'it can continued decreased' demonstrate a lack of control over appropriate collocations and verb forms. There is a reliance on basic vocabulary, and some word choices are awkward or incorrect, such as 'household owners charges'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant decline', and avoid repeating the same sentence structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede communication. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('we will discussed'), subject-verb agreement, and awkward sentence construction ('the bar chart shows that can be compares'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the misuse of modal verbs like 'can' in almost every sentence makes the writing sound unnatural. Focusing on basic sentence construction and correct verb tense usage is essential for improvement.

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