Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart shows information about households in owned and rented accommodation in England. After analyzing the pie chart it can be seen clearly that household in owned accommodation highest is 2001 is 69% and the second highest is 1991 is 68%. and the third highest accommodation 2011 is 63% and the fourth highest accommodation1981 is 60%.and the least is 1981 is 22%. Furthermore, households in rented accommodation highest is 1918 is 78% and second highest is 1939 is 69%. household in rented accommodation is 1939 and 1953 is same 69%. and the fourth highest households is 1961 59%. and the fifth highest households percent in 1971 ids 50% and the sixth highest is 1991 and 2001 is same 31%. In conclusion, the chart shows that households in owned and rented accommodation in England and wales between 1981 and 2011. and the highest accommodation is households in rented accommodation 78% .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. Instead of grouping data logically, the response lists figures in a repetitive, mechanical manner (e.g., 'the second highest is 1991 is 68%'). The summary lacks a cohesive synthesis of the information, and the conclusion is inaccurate, referencing a date range not supported by the data provided. The response focuses on listing individual data points rather than reporting main features or making meaningful comparisons, which limits the development of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical progression. Paragraphing is present but does not serve to organize ideas effectively; instead, it separates lists of data points. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences, leading to a disjointed reading experience. The referencing is often unclear, and the repetition of phrases such as 'highest is' and 'households in' makes the text feel mechanical and difficult to follow. The overall structure is fragmented, and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the preceding information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple, functional words like 'highest', 'second highest', and 'accommodation'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined', 'remained stable'). The phrasing is often awkward, such as 'household in owned accommodation highest is 2001', which indicates a lack of control over word choice and collocation. The vocabulary is sufficient only for basic communication of numbers, which is inadequate for an academic task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and simple sentences are often poorly constructed (e.g., 'household in rented accommodation is 1939 and 1953 is same 69%'). Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing capital letters and incorrect use of periods. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are problematic throughout the text. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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