Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar graph compares the proportion of families owning and renting houses in the contituent countries of the United Kingdom namely England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, the rate of the households in rented accommodation had the highest figures in the early years, whereas households in owned accommodation had the lowest. However, there was a substantial change in the latter years as the percentage of rented accommodation decreased constantly, while the figures of owned accommodation rose accordingly.

In 1918, families who rented houses had the highest proportion of around 84%, meanwhile, households who owned houses had the lowest rate of around 22%. The figures fluctuated through the ninety-three years period. It cleary shows that there was a gradual decline in the rate of the house renters from about 84% down to around 43% in 2011.

By contrast, the rate of house owners accumulating for 22% in 1918, became around 63% in 2011. The data shows that between 1918 and 2011, households preferred to own a house rather than to rent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You selected relevant data points, such as the starting percentages in 1918 and the final figures in 2011, to support your summary. However, the task requires a more precise analysis of the data. For instance, you mention that figures 'fluctuated', but the graph shows a relatively consistent trend rather than significant fluctuation. Additionally, the mathematical sum of your 1918 figures (84% + 22% = 106%) suggests a slight misinterpretation of the data presentation, as these categories should ideally complement each other or be described more carefully. Overall, the response covers the requirements well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'In 1918', 'By contrast', and 'However' to guide the reader through the information. The progression of ideas is clear, moving from the general trend to specific data points. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed analysis. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions could be more sophisticated to improve the overall cohesion of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'substantial change', and 'accumulating'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'accumulating for 22%', which is not the most natural way to express the data. Additionally, there is a spelling error in 'contituent' and 'cleary'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your word choices are consistently accurate and natural in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'the rate of the households' (unnecessary article) and 'the ninety-three years period' (should be 'ninety-three-year period'). Despite these errors, your meaning is always clear, and the errors do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and compound adjectives. Your control of basic grammar is generally solid.

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