Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided grouped bar graph illustration depicts the difference between own houses and rented houses proportions located in England and Whales over a specific time period. Overall the graph represents that rented accommodation demand has decreased over the time and own properties has shown the upward trend over the 93 year time period.

In 1918 rented houses have occupied around 75 percent and had a slight drop until year 1961. However from 1961 there was a sharp drop until 2001 which is almost around 31 percent followed by the year 2011 with slight increase to 35 percent approximately.

Furthermore, own proprietorship has shown a significant upward trend from year 1918 to 2001 from approximately 23 percent to 68 percent respectively over a 83 year time period and has shown slight decrease from 2001 to 2011 from 68 to 64 proportion respectively.

To conclude, There was an observable upward trend for own households and significant downward trend for rented households.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully identifies the main trends and provides a clear overview of the data. You have selected key features, such as the initial high percentage of rented accommodation and the subsequent shift toward home ownership. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the two categories at specific points in time. For instance, noting the 'crossover' point where ownership overtook renting would have strengthened the response. The data points are generally accurate, though the description of the 1961-2001 period as a 'sharp drop' is a good observation that captures the essence of the trend well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion. The progression of ideas is clear, moving from the general overview to specific data points. You use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'However', and 'To conclude' to link your ideas. While the structure is functional, the flow between sentences could be more sophisticated. Some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be tighter to avoid repetitive sentence structures. Overall, the paragraphing is appropriate and contributes to a coherent reading experience.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'upward trend', 'significant', and 'proportion'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'own houses' is better expressed as 'home ownership' or 'owner-occupied housing', and 'own proprietorship' is not standard terminology in this context. Additionally, 'Whales' is a spelling error for 'Wales'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your range of academic collocations would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'rented houses have occupied' (should be 'accounted for' or 'represented'), 'own houses... has shown' (subject-verb agreement error), and '64 proportion' (should be '64 percent'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are minor issues with capitalization and article usage. While the meaning is always clear, the frequency of these small errors limits the score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that nouns are modified by appropriate adjectives or quantifiers.

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