Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given bar chart depict the proportion of household in owned and tenat residental in england and wales in 1918 to 2001.

overall,i can cleary seen that reside in rented accomdation are highest the while own accomdation pepole are peak in 2009.

to begin with,in 1918 househould owned was peak on this chart at 78% or rented was shows at 22%followed this owner house are fell down in 1939 ten percent 68% or owener climb at 32% while was in 1953 to 1981 owner are remain stable and fell down after four years after again fell down in two decades shows at 68% to 59% and 40%.on the other hand owner remqin stable after four years after one decade incresed slightly at 50% after ten years dramticy jump into 60%.

in contrast,in 1991 to 2011 was owner invcreased dramtcily shows at 68 % after ten years gain one percent more made up at 69% after that slight go down at 63%wherase tenated accomdation was decreassed fell down regulary in 1991 to 2001 reamin stable in this chart after ending gradually increase at 45%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the main features of the chart, but the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the description of the trends in 1918 and 1939 contradicts the visual data provided in the chart. Furthermore, the summary lacks a clear overview of the long-term trends, as the attempt at an 'overall' statement is poorly phrased and contains significant factual errors regarding the peak years. The data points mentioned are frequently inconsistent with the provided graph, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is severely hampered by poor sentence structure and confusing transitions. Phrases like 'to begin with' and 'in contrast' are used, but they do not effectively link the ideas or clarify the comparisons between the two categories. The referencing is often unclear, and the lack of proper punctuation makes it difficult to distinguish between different time periods and data points, leading to a disjointed and repetitive flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and contains numerous spelling errors, such as 'tenat', 'residental', 'pepole', 'remqin', and 'dramticy'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; the writer relies on basic verbs like 'climb', 'fell', and 'jump' without demonstrating the ability to use more precise academic terminology. Many word choices are incorrect or non-standard, which frequently impedes the reader's understanding of the data being presented.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many run-on sentences and missing articles. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, as seen in 'owner are remain stable' and 'househould owned was peak'. Punctuation is largely absent or misused, making the text difficult to parse. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the high frequency of errors causes significant difficulty for the reader.

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