Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar graph compares the proportion of households in owned and rented accomodation in the cities like England and Wales in the years between 1918 and 2011.
Overall, the chart illustrates the owning and rented accommodations as well from 1918 to 2011 in the well-known cities like England and Wales. In 1918, the number of the households in owned accommodation begins to start increasing gradually day by day, meanwhile households in rented accommodation continuously dropped, however there was a phase like in 1971 became balanced.
From 1918 to 2011, the both phases faced the exactly opposite situations one exceed while, the other declined. In this, households in rented accommodation was lower in 1918 but gradually went up higher and in owned accommodation rose up and began to decline later.
From 1917 to 201, things became exactly opposite from the previous record, nevertheless, the both phases situations were different from each other and eventually in 1917 they became stable
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing a bar graph about housing in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. However, the interpretation of the data contains major inaccuracies and confusion regarding the trends. For example, the student states that households in rented accommodation 'continuously dropped' while also noting they went 'up higher', and the dates referenced near the end ('1917 to 201') contradict the timeline provided in the prompt. Furthermore, key features and comparisons are poorly selected, lacking specific data points or accurate overviews, which places the response within the Band 4 descriptor for partial or inaccurate task fulfillment.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. The introduction is followed by body paragraphs that contain repetitive ideas and contradictory statements, making the progression difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'meanwhile', 'however', and 'nevertheless', which fail to establish clear relationships between ideas. Additionally, referencing is unclear, leading to confusion about which data set is being discussed in the final sections, aligning closely with Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and occasionally inaccurate for an Academic Task 1 response. Phrases like 'well-known cities like England and Wales' (treating countries as cities) and 'phases faced the exactly opposite situations' demonstrate a limited lexical range and poor word choice. There are also noticeable issues with collocation and terminology related to graphical data description. While some basic vocabulary is adequate to convey simple concepts, the frequent lexical errors and lack of precision constrain the score to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning. Examples include 'the number of the households in owned accommodation begins to start increasing gradually day by day' and 'the both phases situations were different'. There are issues with tense consistency, article usage, and redundant phrasing ('begins to start'). Although a few simple sentences are comprehensible, the high frequency of grammatical errors and faulty complex structures severely impedes effective communication, fitting the Band 4 profile.
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