Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar graph illustrate the proportion of owned and rented household accommodation in two countries Englans and Wales in time period between 1918 and 2011.

In over all, the rented household accomodations are highest while ownership is at lowest in 1918. By the end of period, this trend is totally changed and owned accomodations are more than the rented.

Initally, the highest figure was recorded about 80% of rented housing gradually the ratio falls as 1939 and 1959 and remains less than 70%. In contrast the ownership is gradualy goes upward starting from more than 20% to 41%. Moreover in 1971 they both contributes for equal ratios 50%.

Owned accomodations surge i

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The student attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, noting the general shift from rented to owned accommodation between 1918 and 2011, and correctly highlighting the crossover point in 1971. However, the response is cut off mid-sentence at 'Owned accomodations surge i' and contains numerous spelling and factual inaccuracies, such as referring to England and Wales as 'two countries' and misinterpreting the 1918 renting figure. Most importantly, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 113 words. This severely limits the depth of data reporting and comparison required for Academic Task 1, resulting in a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response shows some basic organisation, opening with a general introduction and following with a chronological description of the data. However, paragraphing is underdeveloped, and the text ends abruptly in the middle of a sentence due to the strict length limitation. While transitional phrases like 'In contrast' and 'Moreover' are attempted, referencing and overall progression are weak. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and inaccurately in places, and the lack of a complete concluding or extended body paragraph hinders the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with terms such as 'proportion', 'ratio', and 'figure'. There are several spelling mistakes throughout the text, including 'illustrate' (instead of illustrates), 'Englans', 'accomodations', and 'Initally'. While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary like 'ownership', 'rented housing', and 'percentage', the range is limited and inadequate for a fully developed Academic Task 1 response. Word choice errors and misspellings occasionally impede comprehension, reflecting a Band 5 performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical structures attempted are largely simple or faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'The given bar graph illustrate' instead of illustrates, and 'ownership is gradualy goes upward'. Punctuation and spelling errors are also noticeable throughout the short text. While the writer can construct basic descriptive sentences, the high frequency of grammatical inaccuracies and the incomplete final sentence restrict the score to Band 4.5.

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