Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph present the proportion of households that owned and people who leased accommodation in england and wales between the year 1918 to 2011.

Overall, The households that was rented accommodation is very high in 1918 and after that it was dropping and getting fall by years and became too low in 2001. The owned house is was less in 1918, after they get increasing years by years and they got rose many owned home in 2001.

The percentage of people who have their owned households in 1918 was around 23%, by the year 1939 it sharply rise and goes upto 32% after that it plateaud at this level in 1953 before experiencing its largest steadily increasing from 1953 to 2001 around 68% get rose.

The percentage of people on rented house was biggest number in 1918 was 78% it get fall in 1939 and became 68% it remained same in 1953, by the end of 1961 it get decrease by year and fall to 31% in 2001, after highly fall it take rise in the 2011 get 35%

In 1918, most house in rented is 78% and owned was 22% get rose, by the year it was get changed and in the 2001 surpassed by owned house 35% rented get 64% at the end of 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main trends in the chart showing households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. While an overview is attempted in the second sentence, it is expressed rather clumsily. Key features are identified, such as the high percentage of rented accommodation in 1918 and the steady rise in homeownership culminating in 2001. However, there are numerous inaccuracies in the reporting of specific data points. For example, the student states that rented housing fell to 31% in 2001 and then rose to 35% in 2011, but also mentions confusing figures like '64% at the end of 2011' for rented accommodation. Furthermore, some data is misread or awkwardly phrased, leading to a partial and somewhat confused coverage of the task requirements. Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is divided into paragraphs, but the paragraphing is erratic and difficult to follow logically. There is an attempt to sequence information chronologically, but sentences are often abruptly joined or poorly structured, leading to a lack of overall progression. Cohesive devices are used very mechanically or are entirely missing between clauses, resulting in run-on sentences and fragments. For instance, transitions like 'after that it was dropping' and 'by the year it was get changed' disrupt the flow and make the relationships between ideas unclear. Referencing is also faulty, as pronouns and subject-verb agreements frequently become detached from their intended antecedents. Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'house', 'people', 'get', and 'high'. There are frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'leased accommodation', 'getting fall', 'largest steadily increasing', and 'biggest number'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'plateaud' and 'surpassed', but these are often incorrectly spelled or used with grammatical errors (e.g., 'plateaud', 'sharply rise'). Spelling and morphological errors are prevalent throughout the text, constraining communication and keeping the score within the lower bands. Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences attempt complexity but result in severe errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure. Examples of persistent errors include 'The bar graph present', 'The households that was rented', 'they get increasing years by years', and 'rented get 64%'. Simple sentences are rare, and attempts at complex sentences are almost always faulty, leading to frequent misunderstandings for the reader. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing periods and commas creating confusing run-on sentences. Band 4.0.

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