Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart below illustrates the information of owned households and rented accommodation between the year 1918 and 2011 in England and Wales.
It can be observed that there is a very huge difference in the year 1918 and 2011. In 1918 the percentage of households in owned accommodation is nearly 22% and nearly 80% for rented accommodation. Whereas the percentage of owned household in 1918 is nearly opposite that is 75% and the rented accommodation is 38%.
Firstly, the proportion of owned residence is mostly 40% and 60% in years 1961 and 1981 which is a great fluctuation observed. Furthermore, the proportion of rented homes are 60% and 40%.
Secondly, we can see, in the year 1971, both the elements are in equal proportion. that is 50% and this is the starting point of increasing the owned homes and decreasing the percentage of rented homes. Which shows that citizens of England and Wales are likely lives in their own owned houses.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the prompt by discussing the chart on housing in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. However, there are significant data misinterpretations and inaccuracies. For example, the writer states that in 1918 owned accommodation was nearly 22% and rented was 80%, but then immediately contradicts themselves later in the same paragraph by claiming owned was 75% and rented 38% for that year. Furthermore, the figures cited for 2011 (owned 75% or rented 38%) are completely inverted compared to the actual data, where owned was 64% and rented was 36%. While the major cross-over point in 1971 (50/50) is correctly identified, the overall reporting of trends is confused and contains major factual errors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into short paragraphs, attempting to use transitional markers such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'Secondly'. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by contradictory statements and confusing sentence structures. For instance, the second paragraph opens with a confusing comparison of 1918 and 2011 values that mixes up the years and the data series. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'both the elements are in equal proportion', which makes following the argument difficult. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow requires tighter control.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive ('percentage of households', 'owned accommodation', 'rented accommodation'). There are frequent lexical errors and inaccurate word choices, such as 'owned households', 'owned residence', and 'citizens of England and Wales are likely lives in their own owned houses'. Attempts at less common vocabulary result in unnatural collocations or grammatical awkwardness. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the overall lexical range restricts effective communication of data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The student uses a mix of simple and attempted complex sentences, but grammatical control is weak. There are numerous errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure. Examples include: '...the percentage of households in owned accommodation is nearly 22%' (tense shift from past chart data), '...the percentage of owned household in 1918 is nearly opposite that is 75%' (run-on/fragmented structure), and '...are likely lives in their own owned houses' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is also problematic, with sentence fragments like 'that is 50% and this is the starting point...' appearing frequently.
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