Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

According to chart,In 1918 there were 23% households in owned accomodation and 78% in rented while in 2011 hosueholds in owned accomodation were about 60 to 70 percent and 30 to 40 percent in rented accomodation.The data shows significant increase in interest towards owned accomodation which could be due to different circumstances.After 2001 and in 2011, there is a small decrease in households in owned accomodation and increase in rented accomodation. 1971 there was equal percentage of the people in rented and owned accomodation.The decrease in rented residency may be due to high rents and housing schemes or projects.The other possible reasons could be the Govt policies and cheaper housing projects and availability of appartments and sense of investment in people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 121 words, which significantly impacts Task Achievement. While the student attempts to report some main features—such as the figures for 1918, 2011, and the crossover point in 1971—the data points are sometimes imprecise or slightly inaccurate (e.g., stating 78% instead of 77% in 1918, and giving ranges like "60 to 70 percent" instead of stating the exact 2011 figures clearly). Furthermore, the student speculates extensively on the causes of the trends ("which could be due to different circumstances", "high rents and housing schemes"), which goes beyond the data provided in an Academic Task 1 response and reflects a lack of understanding of the task requirements. Consequently, the score is limited to Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

Coherence is notably weak, primarily because the response consists of a single poorly-constructed paragraph with no clear paragraph breaks between the introduction and body details. There is a lack of logical progression; sentences are clustered together without adequate cohesive devices or transitions (e.g., jumping abruptly from 2011 data to general trend commentary and back to specific years). Referencing and linking are minimal, making the flow disjointed and difficult to follow. Although some time markers like "In 1918" and "After 2001" are used, the overall structural organization does not meet the standards for a cohesive academic report. This corresponds to a Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like "households", "owned", "rented", and "accomodation" (which is consistently misspelled throughout the text as "accomodation" and "appartments"). There is a lack of flexible or sophisticated phrasing, and attempts to use less common vocabulary are absent. Word choice is occasionally imprecise, and spelling errors ("hosueholds", "appartments") detract from the quality of the writing. However, the basic meaning remains understandable. These limitations place the lexical resource firmly at Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and straightforward descriptive sentences with occasional flawed attempts at more complex structures (e.g., using relative or participial clauses). Punctuation and capitalization are poorly controlled, with missing spaces after commas (e.g., "chart,In 1918") and missing terminal punctuation in places. Grammatical errors, particularly missing articles (e.g., "According to chart", "the Govt policies") and awkward phrasing, occur frequently. Because errors are frequent and occasionally strain the reader's comprehension, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.

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