Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart illustrates the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. The number of households in owned accommodation in England in 1918 is extremely low and the households in rented accommodation in England in 1918 is excessive high.
On the other hand, in 1939 owned accommodation in England is above 30% and rented accommodation in England is above the 65% while compare to 1953 owned accommodation in England are same and rented accommodation in England are same . In 1961 owned accommodation in England is above 40% and rented accommodation in England is around 60% while 1971 owned accommodation in England and rented accommodation are same 50%.In 1981 owned accommodation in England is 60% and rented accommodation in England is 40% while 1991 owned accommodation in England is above 65% and rented accommodation in England is little above to 30%. In 2001 owned accommodation in England is above 65% and rented accommodation in England is above to 30% while 2011 owned accommodation in England is above to 60% and rented accommodation in England is above the 65%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to cover the main trends in the chart, noting the initial figures in 1918 and the crossover around 1971. However, the response contains a major factual error at the end, stating that in 2011 'rented accommodation in England is above the 65%', which directly contradicts the visual data showing rented accommodation at 36% and owning at 64%. Furthermore, there is no overview paragraph provided, which is an essential requirement for Task 1 to achieve a Band 6 or higher. The reporting of data points is mechanical and lacks a synthesis of overall trends, resulting in a partial treatment of the task. Band score: 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text suffers significantly from a lack of proper paragraphing, as the entire body of the report is crammed into a single, massive block of text following the introduction. This makes the response difficult to follow. While basic cohesive devices such as 'while', 'on the other hand', and chronological markers like 'In 1961' and 'In 1981' are used, referencing and logical progression are frequently faulty. The monotonous repetition of sentence structures (e.g., 'owned accommodation in England is...') creates a mechanical flow rather than a natural, coherent progression of ideas. Band score: 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is very limited and repetitive. The student continuously relies on basic terms such as 'percentage', 'households', 'owned accommodation', and 'rented accommodation' without attempting synonyms or paraphrasing. Furthermore, there are several lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'excessive high' instead of 'exceedingly high' or 'very high'. More advanced vocabulary related to trends, proportions, and changes is entirely absent, constraining the response to a basic vocabulary band. Band score: 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying almost exclusively on repetitive simple and low-level complex structures (using 'while' to link clauses). There are frequent errors in verb tense and agreement, such as 'owned accommodation in England are same' and 'is above to 30%'. Punctuation is also poorly handled, with irregular spacing and missing commas that hinder readability. Although some basic sentences are formed correctly, the frequency of errors and the lack of structural variety prevent the student from reaching a higher band. Band score: 4.5.
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