Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
As we can see in the bar chart i is that there is different percentages of people actually owning a household and people living on the rent in England and Wales is clear difference that the bar chart shows .
As the chart shows that in 1918 the percentage of the household is approximately 20% and the percentage for people living on rent is greater than 70 percent there is huge difference in between the two .
As we can see in the graph there is growing trend for owning a household in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011 this trend started to grow slowly at approximately 20% and then its figure started to grow upward until 1971 where in the graph there was a breakeven between the two .
And in 1981 the trend for owning a house actually outgrow the trend for renting a household and it until it reaches its peak in the 2011 where the trend for owning a house was too much then renting a house
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by describing the overall trends in housing accommodation from 1918 to 2011. However, the task achievement is limited by severe structural and informational deficiencies. The opening sentences are conversational and repetitive, and the student misreads or misrepresents the 2011 data at the end of the essay, claiming that the trend for owning a house was 'too much then renting a house' while ignoring the fact that homeownership actually dropped from its 2001 peak of 69% down to 64% in 2011, whereas renting rose to 36%. Furthermore, key data points like the 1953 figures and specific interval comparisons are omitted. The overview is weak and imprecise, preventing the response from reaching higher bands. It meets the criteria for Band 4.0 due to minimal and partially inaccurate coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing, presented instead as a poorly connected block of text with run-on sentences. Cohesive devices are repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on phrases like 'As we can see' and 'As the chart shows'. Logical progression is severely hindered by the absence of clear punctuation, periods, and capitalization control. For instance, the sentence starting with 'And in 1981 the trend...' drags on with clause after clause without appropriate breaks, making it difficult to follow the logical development of ideas. There is no clear framework or paragraph structure distinguishing an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. This places the response firmly at Band 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'trend', 'household', 'owning', and 'renting' without sufficient variety. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'living on the rent', 'breakeven', and 'outgrow'. The phrase 'too much then renting a house' demonstrates a very limited control of comparative vocabulary. While the basic topic vocabulary is recognizable, the frequency of inappropriate word choices and lack of less common lexical items restrict the score. Spelling and basic word formation are generally functional, but vocabulary limitations impede precise communication. This corresponds to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterized by severe run-on sentences joined improperly by conjunctions and relative clauses, combined with a total absence of correct punctuation or periods. There are numerous basic grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'there is different percentages' and tense inconsistencies. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost uniformly faulty, often resulting in ungrammatical strings of clauses. Punctuation is practically non-existent, and capitalization is erratic (e.g., lowercase 'i' used independently). The majority of sentences contain major structural errors, leading to a band score of 4.0.
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