Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the diagram beneath presents the percentage of households living in their homes or rented homes in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
From the chart below, its shows that from [redacted phone] households in owned had a lower rate than households in rented accommodation. While the years goes by, they was a change from [redacted phone] whereby the households in owned became higher than the households in rented acommodation.
Secondly we could also notice that the households in rented accommodation had a high percentage rate from [redacted phone] and households in owned also increased after 1971.
In addition, households in owned lowered between [redacted phone] while the households in rented accommodation also decreased after 1971
However both the households in owned and the households in rented accommodation had a similarity in 1971 whereby the had the same percentage rate in that particular year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response makes an attempt to summarise the main features of the chart, correctly noting the crossover point in 1971 where both categories reached 50%. However, there are factual inaccuracies in the reporting of trends; for example, the student claims that households in owned accommodation lowered between 1918 and 1961, whereas the data clearly shows an increase from 23% to 41%. Furthermore, the response suffers from a negative word count penalty, as it falls short of the 150-word minimum by 10 words (containing 140 words). Overall, the task is only partially addressed due to inaccuracies and under-development.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response attempts a logical structure by breaking down information into separate paragraphs. However, the progression is weak and somewhat repetitive, with overlapping points about the time periods. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as starting paragraphs with 'Secondly' and 'In addition' when the sequence of points is confused. Paragraphing is also fragmented, resulting in very short, disjointed sections rather than a cohesive flow. Referencing is basic, and overall readability is hindered by mechanical transitions.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'percentage rate', 'households in owned', and 'households in rented accommodation'. There are noticeable word choice and phrasing errors, such as 'While the years goes by, they was a change' and spelling errors like 'acommodation'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying simple ideas, but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent and distracting errors. Examples include tense and agreement issues such as 'its shows that', 'they was a change', 'households in owned had a lower rate', and 'whereby the had the same percentage rate'. Punctuation is largely absent, with missing capitalisation at the start of sentences and missing full stops at the end. These recurring errors frequently impede communication and strain the reader.
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