Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graps illustrates the number of house luggage in owned or rented living place in England and Wales during 1918 and 2011. It demonstrates that in the bignning few decades, there was gradual decrease in the household in rented apartments while in coming decades, there was rapid decrease in the luggage.However, the rise in the household continuously seen in the owned living places after each deacade.
The percentage of house hold in the rented accomodation were maximum in initial few decades while its downfall was seen in coming decades due to the availability of the fully furnished accomodations in the modern world. While in the owned houses, there were minimum luggage of house than the coming decades. The numer of house hold increases in next decades to maximu
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, finishing significantly short at 128 words. Furthermore, the content fails to properly report the main features and trends of the chart. The student misinterprets the data categories entirely, referring to households as house luggage, number of house luggage, and apartments, which demonstrates a serious misunderstanding of the visual data. While there is a basic attempt to describe upward and downward trends over the decades, the lack of specific data points (such as starting and ending percentages) and the incomplete ending of the text mean that the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The organization of the text is hindered by poor paragraphing and abrupt cut-offs. While the student attempts to sequence ideas chronologically and makes some use of cohesive devices like 'However' and 'While', the progression of logic is frequently broken by severe lexical errors and incomprehensible phrasing. Paragraphing is not used effectively, with the essay splitting awkwardly into two short blocks, the second of which trails off mid-sentence ('maximu'). Referencing is frequently unclear due to misused pronouns and nouns.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical resource is severely limited and inappropriate for an Academic task. The student commits persistent and egregious word-choice errors, notably substituting the word 'households' with 'house luggage', 'luggage', and 'house hold'. Other terms such as 'bignning' and 'deacade' reflect major spelling deficiencies. Although common vocabulary like 'percentage', 'decrease', and 'rise' appear, the pervasive misuse of basic terminology impedes communication and lowers the lexical score significantly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is restricted mainly to simple and attempted complex sentences, all of which contain frequent errors. Examples include 'there was gradual decrease in the household in rented apartments' (missing articles) and 'the rise in the household continuously seen' (missing auxiliary verb and passive voice construction). Punctuation and word forms are handled poorly, and the incomplete final sentence demonstrates a lack of basic grammatical control. Errors are dense and frequently obscure the intended meaning.
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