Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The renderd bar graph delinates the imformation about the households in owned and rented accommodation in england and wales between 1918 to 2011.The data calibrated in percentage.
At a fleeting glance, it is vivid that the highest rented accommodation was nearly 77 percentage of household in 1918 and there was drastic decrease in owned accommodation about 23 percentage of households.In 2011 owned accommodation was approximatly 65% of households. It reduce to 37 percentage of households in rented accommodation in 2011.In 1991 it seen that owned accommodation, there were around 70% of household. It collapes to 32 percentage of rented accommodation in 1991.
By probing further, In 2001 owned accommodation was around 70 % of households.There was drastic decrease in rented accommodation at 31% of household. In 1971 owned and rented accommodations were around 50 percentage of households both were remainstable.
In 1961 owned accommodation was closely 40% of households and slightly up at 59% of households of rented accommodation in 1961.
Thus,from an overall analysis,It can be extroplated that there were so many fluctiution in both accommodation in england and wales in 1918 to 2011
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting the general trends and providing specific data points such as the 1918 figures (77% rented, 23% owned) and the 2011 figures. However, there are several inaccurate data reports and confusion regarding the years and values. For instance, the student states that in 1991 owned accommodation was around 70% and then mentions 'It collapes to 32 percentage of rented accommodation in 1991', which is confusingly phrased. Furthermore, the overview provided at the end ('so many fluctiution') is overly simplistic and slightly inaccurate, as the trend shows a clear long-term shift rather than erratic fluctuation. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially due to data misreadings and unclear reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, which provides a basic structural framework. However, the logical progression is hindered by confusing transitions and erratic sequencing of years (jumping from 1918 and 2011 to 1991, then back to 2001, 1971, and 1961). Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inaccurately, as seen in phrases like 'At a fleeting glance, it is vivid that' and 'By probing further'. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the comparisons being made between owned and rented accommodation.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, with frequent spelling errors ('renderd', 'delinates', 'imformation', 'approximatly', 'collapes', 'fluctiution'). The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'extroplated' and 'drastic decrease', but these are often misused or misspelled. Word choices lack precision, and the numerous errors in spelling and word formation place a noticeable strain on the reader, keeping the lexical score at a lower band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in tense usage ('It reduce', 'it seen', 'both were remainstable'), missing articles, and punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods. Sentences like 'In 1961 owned accommodation was closely 40% of households and slightly up at 59% of households of rented accommodation in 1961' demonstrate poor syntactic control and cause significant difficulty for the reader.
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