Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart depicts the proportion of were families in possessed and were tenants housing in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overall, owning the house in the past was much easier than renting it. But, in the presence era owning house is most difficult thing than renting it .
In 1918, possessing house was approximately 20 percentage while tenanting house was around about 75 percentage. As the time flies, owning house also increased rapidly and came at around about 30 percentage in 1939 while renting house decline slightly and came at roughly 65 percentage. In 1953, the figures remained same as in 1939. Howerver, in 1961 proportion owning of households increased at 40 percentage. Whereas, renting a household decreased and came to approximatelt 60 percentage. Paradoxically, the ratio of renting house and owning came at same position.
In 1981, the ratio of owning household came to 60% while renting came to 40%. in 1991, owning household constantly rose up and came to around about 70% and renting came to around about 30%. In 2001, owning house remained constant as in 1
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main trends in the chart comparing owned and rented accommodation between 1918 and 2011. However, the overview provided in the second paragraph contains inaccurate interpretations of the data, incorrectly asserting that owning a house was 'much easier than renting it' in the past. Furthermore, several data points are misread or confused, such as stating that in 1918 possessing a house was approximately 20 percentage while renting was around 75 percentage (renting was 77, owning was 23, which is close, but subsequent data is flawed), and the text cuts off incomplete at the end. The response does capture some correct general trends like the rise in ownership and fall in renting up to 1991, but inaccurate details and analytical flaws limit its score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response shows some basic organization into paragraphs, attempting a chronological reporting of the data. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, repetitive sentence structures, and mechanical cohesive devices like 'As the time flies' and 'Paradoxically'. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the final thought abruptly cutting off mid-sentence ('In 2001, owning house remained constant as in 1'). Referencing and referencing links between ideas are often unclear, and the overall arrangement fails to maintain a clear, cohesive narrative throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is highly repetitive and restricted, frequently featuring non-standard or inaccurate collocations such as 'were families in possessed and were tenants housing', 'possessing house', and 'tenanting house'. There are frequent word-choice errors that obscure meaning, and attempts at less common vocabulary result in unnatural expressions like 'presence era' instead of current era or present day. Spelling and morphological errors (e.g., 'decline' instead of declined, 'approximatelt') further restrict the lexical range to a basic level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent foundational errors. There are numerous missing articles ('owning house', 'renting house'), incorrect verb forms ('renting house decline slightly'), and faulty prepositional phrases ('came at same position', 'increased at 40 percentage'). The sentence structures often break down, and the response ends abruptly with an incomplete sentence. These persistent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band score.
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