Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this chart illustrate the information about households accomodation that peoples of england and wales accomodated during the years 1918 and 2011 whether it was rented or owned.

the owerall chart view shows that household in reanted accomdation at tha start is high but at tha end household in owned accomdation is high people were shifted from rental residents to owned residents.

at the start in 1918 owned resident percentage in england and wales is about 23 % but rental accomdation is about 78% with the passage of time people shifted toward owned resident and in 1939 it was 31% and 68% and in 1953 itwas with same percentage as in 1961 people has household owned and rental property or resident respectively in 1961 owmed residence percentage increased to 40 and rented decreased to 58 however in 1971 both the percentage of rental and owned resident become equal which is about 50% and after it from 1971 to 2011 owned resident percentage increased and rental decreased its percentage was same in 1991 and 2001 and in 2011 chart showed another fluctation and rental residence icreasd to 38% from 32% and owned residence percentage decreased by aboutb 62%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the main trends shown in the chart regarding housing in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, noting the shift from rented to owned accommodation over the period. However, the development of ideas is limited and mechanical. The student attempts to report a sequence of data points, but some figures are inaccurately cited (for instance, stating that in 1918 rental accommodation was about 78 percent and later mentioning percentages like 62 percent and 58 percent which do not precisely match the visual data). Furthermore, the description becomes a run-on sequence of numbers without clear synthesis or well-selected grouping. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to present a more accurate reading of the data, avoid listing every single year mechanically, and develop a clearer, more fully supported overview of the main comparative features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The organization of the text shows some basic structure, attempting an introduction, an overview, and a body section detailing the timeline. However, there is no clear overall progression due to severe issues with paragraphing and punctuation. The entire body of the response is written as a single, massive run-on sentence with almost no periods or capital letters to separate distinct thoughts. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and occasionally inaccurate, relying heavily on basic transition phrases like 'at the start' and 'with the passage of time' without proper punctuation to guide the reader. To improve, the student must divide the text into logical paragraphs and use appropriate punctuation and cohesive devices to structure sentences clearly and maintain a smooth flow of information.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, utilizing simple terms such as 'chart', 'households', 'accomodation', 'percentage', and 'people'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'accomodation', 'peoples', 'owerall', 'reanted', 'accomdation', 'tha', 'owmed', 'icreasd', and 'b'. Word choices are frequently imprecise or awkward, such as 'rental residents', 'owned resident percentage', and 'another fluctation'. These lexical limitations and frequent spelling errors strain the reader and obscure precise meaning. To reach a higher band, the writer needs to expand their lexical range beyond repetitive everyday words, use correct word forms and spellings, and incorporate less common vocabulary related to data trends and housing with greater accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is extremely limited, characterized by a complete failure to use proper sentence boundaries, resulting in one long, unpunctuated stream of text across the entire second half of the response. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'this chart illustrate', 'resident percentage in england and wales is about', 'people has household owned', and 'rental residence icreasd to 38%'. Complex sentence structures are attempted through coordination and subordination, but they are consistently faulty and lack proper punctuation. To move up to a higher band, the student must demonstrate control over basic sentence boundaries, using full stops and capital letters correctly, and significantly reduce the frequency of grammatical errors in tense consistency and clause structures.

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