Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar graph illustrates information about the percentage of purchasing a new house or a rented apartments in two countries England or wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, the percentage of rented condos houses drastically decrease over the period while the proportion of own residential homes significantly increased from 1918 to 2011.

To begin with, 78% of people in 1918 used to live in a rented house which fell up to 69% in 1939 and 1953. The number of houses continuously showed a declined trend since the year 2001 which is around 30%. Then the number rose up to 38%.

In contrast, the population in owned accommodations are comparatively lower than rented apartments which is 22% before it skyrocketed to 32% in 1939 and 1953. Further, it increase from 40% in 1961 to approximately 70% in 2001 and became the highest favourable choice of living. Then, it showed a sudden fall up to 2011 which is 64%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by providing an overview and selecting the main trends from the chart regarding housing in England and Wales. The overview captures the main movements well, noting that rented accommodation decreased while owned homes increased. However, some parts of the response are slightly under-developed or contain minor inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the starting figure for renting is transcribed as 78% rather than approximately 77%, and details about specific years occasionally blur. To reach a higher band, the response would need to consistently maintain precision when reporting figures across the entire timeline without minor data discrepancies.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph structure separating the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Transition signals such as 'Overall', 'To begin with', and 'In contrast' are used to guide the reader through the data. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or features slight awkwardness in referencing, such as the sudden shift between categories. While logical progression is established, paragraphing and referencing can be refined to ensure seamless transitions between comparative points. To improve further, the writer should ensure that cohesive devices connect ideas more naturally and that the progression of data flows without abrupt leaps between years.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'drastically decrease', 'significantly increased', and 'skyrocketed'. However, there are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and awkward collocations, such as 'percentage of purchasing a new house or a rented apartments' and 'highest favourable choice of living', where the word forms or prepositions do not align naturally. Spelling and word choice errors are present but do not entirely impede communication. To move to a higher band, the student needs to use precise word forms consistently and demonstrate a more natural control of academic collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, attempting various grammatical forms with moderate success. There are several grammatical errors regarding subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'the number of houses continuously showed a declined trend' (instead of declining trend), 'the population in owned accommodations are' (instead of is), and 'it increase' (instead of increased). These errors occur frequently enough to affect overall accuracy, though they rarely impede the reader's understanding. To achieve a higher band, the student must exercise greater control over verb tenses and agreement in complex clauses.

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