Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph represents the rate of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall, it can be noticed, in the UK, the highest number of households in rented home whereas, the lowest number of household in owned home.

To begin with, in 1918 to 1961, huge amount households in owned accommodation, which were around 60% to 80%.Moreover, the year of 1971, the rate of owned accommodation as well as, rented home. which were 50%, both were similar.

Is it noticable the trend has changed, between in 1981 to 2011, peoples prefer to lived in their own house, the percentage of households in owned accommodation increased, which were almost 60% to 70%. However, the ratio of households in rented accommodation decreased, the rate of households rented accommodation of between 30% to 40%. Eventually, the rate of households trend has changed. most people prefered as owned accommodation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement, containing 138 words instead of the required 150 words. Furthermore, the task is only partially addressed. The overview is confused and factually inaccurate, claiming that there was the highest number of households in rented homes and the lowest in owned homes overall, which contradicts the graph where ownership overtook renting in the 1970s. The reporting of data contains major inaccuracies and confusion, such as stating that between 1918 and 1961 there was a 'huge amount households in owned accommodation, which were around 60% to 80%,' whereas owned accommodation actually started at 23% and only reached 41% by 1961. Key trends are poorly identified and supported, resulting in a minimal and inadequate coverage of the visual data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation with transitional phrases like 'To begin with' and 'However,' but the response lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraphing is extremely fragmented and disjointed, with single-sentence paragraphs that disrupt the logical flow of ideas. Cohesive devices are used inaccurately or repetitively, such as 'which were' and 'between in,' leading to confusing referencing where it is difficult to determine what the pronouns or clauses refer to. The overall arrangement of information is disjointed, making the text hard to follow cohesively.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The response contains noticeable word choice and collocation errors that cause difficulty for the reader, such as 'rate of households' instead of 'percentage of households', 'rented home' instead of 'rented accommodation', and 'peoples prefer to lived' which mixes lexical and grammatical issues. There are also awkward phrasings like 'owned home' and repeated use of basic terms. While attempts are made to use descriptive vocabulary, inaccurate word forms and restricted flexibility constrain the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent attempts at complex sentences resulting in severe structural faults and ungrammatical fragments, such as 'which were around 60% to 80%' and 'which were 50%, both were similar.' There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense usage, and missing verbs (e.g., 'lowest number of household in owned home' and 'peoples prefer to lived'). Punctuation is also problematic, including run-on structures and misplaced commas that impede communication and cause difficulty for the reader.

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