Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph summarise the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall, the individuals who lives in rented houses have strong percentage in the begining and have steady decrement whole over the period while the citizens who have thier owne household also have steady increment from 1918 and 2001.

In 1918, renting was by far the most common form of accommodation, accounting for approximately 77% of households, while only 23% of households owned their homes. By 1939, the proportion of homeowners had risen to around 32%, whereas renting had fallen to about 68%. The figures remained almost unchanged in 1953. However, by 1961, home ownership had increased to approximately 42%, while renting had dropped to 58%.

In 1971, the two categories were equal, with 50% of households owning their homes and 50% renting. After this point, ownership continued to rise, reaching about 60% in 1981 and 69% in 1991. It peaked at approximately 70% in 2001 before falling slightly to 65% in 2011. In contrast, the proportion of rented accommodation fell to around 30% in 2001, before increasing slightly to 35% in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response covers the main features accurately and gives a clear overview: renting was initially dominant, ownership generally rose, and the two proportions met at 50% in 1971. The key figures are well selected, including the unchanged 1939 and 1953 levels and the later ownership peak around 2001. The final reversal is also reported, so the overview does not incorrectly imply uninterrupted growth. This is a well-supported account of the chart. To make the overview more precise, avoid describing renting as declining steadily throughout, since it rises again by 2011; similarly, state explicitly that ownership became the larger category after 1971. The opening calls the visual a “line graph,” although it is a bar chart. (13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a clear sequence: an introduction and overview are followed by two chronological paragraphs, first covering 1918–1961 and then 1971–2011. Transitions such as “By 1939,” “However,” “After this point,” and “In contrast” help readers follow the comparisons. The paired figures are generally easy to track. Some cohesion is less controlled in the overview: “while” links the two trends, but the sentence is awkwardly constructed and “whole over the period” is unclear. The repeated chronological openings also make the account somewhat formulaic. For stronger progression, group the data around the crossover and subsequent reversal, and use clearer references to the ownership and renting proportions rather than repeating category labels.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The response uses an adequate range of chart vocabulary, including “accounting for,” “proportion,” “remained almost unchanged,” “peaked,” and “increased slightly.” These choices communicate the data clearly, and the writer attempts more descriptive language in the overview. However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “strong percentage,” “steady decrement,” and “individuals who lives in rented houses” do not express the trends idiomatically. There are also spelling errors in “begining,” “thier,” and “owne,” and “line graph” misidentifies the chart type. These slips do not prevent understanding, but more precise, conventional language for describing proportions and trends would improve control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

There is a useful mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “while,” “whereas,” and “before,” and most of the detailed data sentences are grammatically clear. For example, “By 1939, the proportion of homeowners had risen … whereas renting had fallen” is well controlled. Some errors remain, particularly in the overview: “The line graph summarise” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the individuals who lives” also has disagreement. The phrase “have steady decrement whole over the period” has faulty sentence construction, while “citizens who have thier owne household also have steady increment” is difficult to parse. Improve agreement and build the overview with complete, direct clauses; this would make the range already attempted more accurate.

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